Let it burst(and bloom)

longjourneytogether replied to your link: My liveblogs have an actual blog now!

Are you still gonna post links on tumblr? Or will I have to go all the way to another website?? DEAR GOD PLEASE NO

Haha I’ll probably post links on here to the stuff I post on the Wordpress blog, and I’ll post new liveblogs of Save the Pearls on here for awhile while I’m moving my 50 Shades stuff over there, but once I’m done moving the 50 Shades posts I’ll post the liveblogs of everything on my wordpress blog and only post links to it on here…if that makes sense?

Basically I’ll always post something on here whenever there’s a new liveblog, but it won’t always be a full liveblog post, it’ll eventually just be a link to the full liveblog post which will be on worpress.

I think I’m making this sound way more complicated than it really is, haha.

DO NOT WORRY, MAMA WILL HELP U.

Caitlin liveblogs Save the Pearls: Revealing Eden — Chapter 7 [part 4]

So then the airplane takes a sharp turn and throws Eden basically into Bramford’s lap.

He looked stunned and she wondered if he had felt the same mysterious electric charge. Was he wearing some new device that generated overwhelming magnetism?

Sometimes I forget how stupid Eden is, but she always is quick to remind me.

Seriously. WHAT IS THIS FEELING IT’S SO WEIRD. THIS REALLY INSANELY ATTRACTIVE RICH GUY TOUCHED ME AND I FELT ALL TINGLY.

I

WONDER

WHY

THAT

HAPPENED.

Shen slid open the partition and gave her a sympathetic look.
“Would you like an oxy tablet?” he said.
Was he kidding? She’d like a dozen. Only the military had tablets, which gave them the freedom to move around.

….what?

WHAT DOES OXY EVEN DO.

WHY IS IT SO NECESSARY.

WHY DOES THE GOVERNMENT MAKE SURE THAT ALL ITS CITIZENS ARE ADDICTED TO IT.

It’s like Victoria Foyt is trying to pull a Brave New World (by Aldous Huxley) on us. Which is fine, it certainly wouldn’t be the first time, but there is NO PURPOSE FOR IT.

ALSO

VICTORIA FOYT NEVER REALLY EXPLAINS WHAT THE FUCK OXY IS.

WHY IS OXY ALMOST AS IMPORTANT AS FOOD, IF NOT MORE-SO?

WHY IS ANY OF THIS HAPPENING.

WHY ISN’T ANYTHING EXPLAINED.

FUCK.

Caitlin liveblogs Save the Pearls: Revealing Eden — Chapter 7 [part 3]

A flickering movement distracted Eden and she turned to find [Bramford] watching shocking Holo-Images of an eight-year-old albino boy. Tuning into the same news feed, she learned that the young Cotton had been found in a cave near the Sahara. Apparently, he’d hidden there for most of his life.

Wait…so he was living above the ground? Near the Sahara? What?

A: How does Eden know what the Sahara is.

B: I hate bad sci-fi books, they always pull shit like this. IN CASE YOU FORGOT THAT YOU WERE READING SCI-FI, HERE HAVE SOME HOLO-SHENANIGANS. Every bad sci-fi book always has some holo-thing. Holo-food. Holo-people. Ughhh.

C: I still don’t understand ANYTHING about this world or how it works, and it’s already chapter 7. I should have way more of this shit figured out by now.

But how had an albino been born in the first place? The Uni-Gov proclaimed that the sterilization program aimed at carriers of the gene had wiped out albinism. Whenever a rare birth occurred, they took away the newborn and cut off the parents’ oxy supply.

I say again: I UNDERSTAND NOTHING ABOUT THIS WORLD OR HOW THINGS WORK.

WHAT IS THE UNI-GOV.

WHO IS A PART OF THE UNI-GOV.

THE WHOLE WORLD? IS IT JUST THE U.S.?

ALSO HOW DOES THAT MAKE LOGICAL SENSE.

“AH YES, I SEE YOU HAVE POOPED OUT A LITTLE ALBINO BABY. lET ME KILL IT FOR YOU AND ALSO PUNISH YOU FOR NOT HAVING BETTER SENSE. I HOPE YOU THINK NEXT TIME BEFORE DECIDING TO HAVE AN ALBINO BABY.”

Also I still don’t understand what oxy is, other than the fact that it is the CREEPIEST DRUG EVER and you inject it THROUGH THE TOP OF YOUR HEAD, while wearing a HAT WITH A NEEDLE IN IT. WHAT. EVEN.

Also in case you were wondering, “They” is referring to black people.

RACISM! HOW DELIGHTFUL!

So then I guess the news story goes on and the little boy is murdered horribly by black people and white people because being Albino is apparently THE WORST THING EVER and you must KILL IT WITH FIRE.

Bramford’s ring flashed and the news story changed. Eden quickly glanced at him, surprised to see the anxiety in his face. Why would a megalomaniac like him care about the doomed Cotton?

Eden, you can call him a megalomaniac and an egotistical ass as much as you want, but until he actually does something to show it, I’m not going to believe you because you’re an unreliable pile of shit.

PRO-TIP: When you’re writing, show, don’t tell (usually. not always.)

If you want your reader to think a character is a horrible, cruel, evil, egotistical asshole, SHOW HIM BEING A HORRIBLE, CRUEL, EVIL, EGOTISTICAL ASSHOLE.

You can’t just say “Oh man he’s such a cruel awful person” and expect us to believe it.

Ughhhh Victoria Foyt WHERE DID YOU LEARN TO WRITE. WHY DO YOU THINK THIS IS OKAY. WHY.